Another month, another snippet from the strange recesses of my mind … This one's the beginning of a young adult fantasy I'm currently reworking. It's called Arcana and there's no information about it currently on this site (ooh, sneak preview!). I'd love to know what you think.
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20/1/2013 09:57:51 am
I think it's very good. If I was doing the look inside thing I suspect I'd be seriously thinking about buying the book.
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20/1/2013 10:20:14 am
A wonderful start to the book. Very intriguing. I'd love to read more.
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21/1/2013 06:08:40 am
Thanks so much, both of you! This gives me hope that I'm on the right track :-)
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21/1/2013 07:06:02 am
Great start! Looking forward to reading more of this!!
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23/1/2013 05:03:42 am
I liked it. It was fast-moving and kept my interest - right up to the point where her phone rings. I would identify the speaker in the room somehow so the reader knows male, female, roommate, stranger, split personality??? But most of all, I would drop the very long narrative that follows. This is where you lost me. Instead, keep the far more interesting conversation going and cut down the "I was dreaming" bit. Then, you'll have the reader by the toe and if they holler it will be because they're ten pages into your MS and late for where ever they were heading. Speaking off, I'm late for work. Thanks for the interesting intro. I can't wait to hear more about it.
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24/1/2013 01:16:36 pm
You're very kind, Lindsey. And Ryan, many thanks for the feedback! :-)
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